Let go

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And did she dare to let go
or opt to lie – imagine fear
She bid her feet to tap and dance
Cause love was song and life was chance

He stood and watched her thwart woe
Oppressed by sin oppressed by throe
And did he dare to let go
Through summer’s sting and winter’s blow

Her eyes were closed and breath was slow
The soul unable to ease and rest
And she did she dare to let go
or opt to lie – imagine fear

He breathed a silent hymn and prayer
But then there came that moment rare
Whereat she smiled and shot a glance
‘There is a world outside one we know.’

 

Photo credits: slodive.com

Posted for poems written on Prompt Nights 

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and posted on Meeting the Bar @ dVerse Pub

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54 thoughts on “Let go

  1. Victoria Ceretto-Slotto says:

    This is so good, Sanaa, and I was so surprised when you said in comments that meter wasn’t your thing, I think all of your poetry is metric, even if you are not aware of it. The art of letting go is no small thing and that is exactly what love is all about.

    • Sanaa says:

      Hello Victoria,

      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 🙂
      Highly appreciated, lots of love 😀
      xoxo

      PS: Sheer dumb luck, I guess 🙂

  2. Glenn Buttkus says:

    Damn, my comment was lost while endeavoring to post it. I will try again. Your style, with its internal rhymes & refrains, & lots of use of meter, is closer to classic forms than some of the rest of us; always enjoy the ride over here

  3. Gayle Walters Rose says:

    I can’t address the meter because I really don’t quite get it but I do know that I love this poem. Letting go can take a lot of courage but be so rewarding too.

  4. Old Egg says:

    Being in love and besotted with each other it is so easy to detach yourself from the real world as you have illustrated so well in your poem. Kurt Vonnegut in his book ‘Cat’s Cradle’ invented the term Karass for like minded people but for lovers it is a Duprass of two! That is what lovers should aim for!

  5. Bryan Ens says:

    The meter of the first 3 stanzas is more irregular, which gives an unsettling feeling (as I think you were striving for). In the last stanza, where things resolve, the meter resolves too. Nicely done.

  6. Charley (Life in Portofino) says:

    I may be over-reading your beautiful poem, but then, the poet merely begins the message and the reader completes it — for better or worse. I see a depth of meaning that goes beyond a dance floor to a pairing of lives at the edge of… parting. It is a wonderful poem, gracefully crafted.

  7. Bjorn Rudberg says:

    I think this is one of your best ever.. the uneasiness in the beginning, until that sweet resolution (as Bryan said you used the meter so well)

  8. lillian says:

    Each reader has a different take….that’s the joy of turning over our words to others. For me, forget the meter — not my thing….but oh how I love the photo and the idea of letting go — the dance. Did you know, my friend, that I love to dance with my husband? However, when I retired, one gift given to me was ballroom dance lessons at a local dance studio. So I took my husband and we ended up only going for one dance. For him to “follow” the instructions…put your foot here, now there, now here….get the pattern, here now there — no here now there. This FABULOUS dancing partner of mine was a freewheeler and absolutely could not put his feet in a cage! So it is the essence of letting go with the dance! And we dance joyously, after 46 years! Thanks for this post my friend. Love it! 🙂

    • Sanaa says:

      Hello Lillian,

      Thanks for stopping by, so glad you liked it ?
      Highly appreciated, have a great week ahead.

      PS: You’re most welcome 🙂 glad it brought up fond memories.

  9. kaykuala h says:

    She bid her feet to tap and dance
    Cause love was song and life was chance

    The many rewards life has to offer is not to be passed off. It is worth a chance to go for it for the rewards are immense!

    Hank

  10. Jae Rose says:

    I think love is often about letting go – of releasing ourselves to be in the moment – love was song and life was chance – my favourite line.. maybe because it can be changed so love is chance and life is song!

  11. Magaly Guerrero says:

    This is another favorite, Sanaa. The tone, the way it progresses, the way I can feel her feelings all the way to my bones…

    I love this line best: “love was song and life was chance”. It’s beautiful poetry, and unavoidable truth.

  12. Gina Morley says:

    I and hubby are totally souls unable to rest, other than in those unexpected moments. Love this piece XXX

  13. gillena says:

    This is beautiful Sanaa, the metaphor of embrace and union in the dance, is sharp.
    Even in the dance there is the dare when one partner is released in a spin. Trust is so important when we have to move outside of our comfort zone

    Well done
    Thanks for linking to my Monday WRites

    much love…

  14. Rommy says:

    This speaks to me of the moment of perfect clarity that comes when we drop the expectations others have forced on us and take advantage of the freedom to finally tune into what we really want.

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