Exclamation comes in bunches

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It bows and cries out in submission;
like sundaes overwhelm the lips unassuming,
a sharp turn,
sudden gust of wind and touchβ€”
shall I befuddle it with a smile,
offer tattered senses and crackers so that depth of feeling
is manageable,
shall I wield my tongue accordingly,
taste outburst as highly seasoned as cinnamon,
as anise?

Exclamation comes in bunches, selfishly,
strewn with echoes of yesterday marks me as his,
electrons, garlic cloves,
celery, batteries, balloons and eggs
provide but little consolationβ€”
shall I strap on some armor,
compose a manifesto in curt reply to punches and blows,
like half moon,
scarlet blushing skin and Monday blues;
we duel powered by surge of adrenaline listening
to evening’s song.

 

 

 

Photo credits: Selective focus photography of purple ice pops, Unsplash

Bjorn hosts at dVerse and invites us to use “conceit,” which is
defined as
an extended and complex metaphor. Come join us! πŸ’

Posted for Meeting the Bar: Conceit @dVerse Poets Pub

Comments

  1. My heart ached reading your words Sanaa 😒

    in curt reply to punches and blows,
    like half moon,
    scarlet blushing skin and Monday blues;.’

    So well written

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Christine πŸ™‚ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  2. Ingrid says:

    ‘shall I wield my tongue accordingly,
    taste outburst as highly seasoned as cinnamon,
    as anise?’

    – this is a poetic ‘Saltimbocca,’ Sanaa (an Italian dish which literally ‘jumps in the mouth!’ A mesmerising take on the prompt ❀️

    1. Sanaa says:

      That is such high praise! Thank you so much, Ingrid πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  3. Bjorn Rudberg says:

    Oh you need a manifesto in response to those punches…

    Those punches… so much bruising

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Bjorn πŸ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

      (and thank you for the glorious prompt) 🌹

  4. Eric Erb says:

    En guard! So rich, so much going on in here. I’m reminded of the 9-volt battery, and the shock it gave on the tongue. And the crackers make it.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Eric πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  5. Very beautifully written Sanaa. The spice of exclamation is always stinging for the good taste or the bad!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Dwight πŸ˜€ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  6. Grace says:

    I love the passionate voice. That manfesto comes with a punch:
    we duel powered by surge of adrenaline listening
    to evening’s song.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Grace πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  7. Selma Martin says:

    Exclamations come in bunches like those punches… as cinnamon and anise… love these lines. Delicious. And so is the photo. thanks for sharing.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Selma πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  8. Helen says:

    You could befuddle anyone or anything with a smile … a magnificent poem!

    1. Sanaa says:

      You are so kind, Helen! Thank you so much for your lovely comment πŸ’„β€οΈ

  9. Decadent verses! Loved this, “shall I strap on some armor, compose a manifesto in curt reply to punches and blows, like half moon” I think sometimes we all hold back part of ourselves in fear, like the half moon, a great metaphor! πŸŒœπŸ’“πŸŒ›

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, my dearest Tricia πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

  10. Gillena Cox says:

    (Wish i had written this)

    “Exclamation comes in bunches,”
    OMG this is amazing.

    MuchπŸ’›love

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Gillena πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it πŸ’„β€οΈ

      Much love back ..

  11. Dora says:

    Sanaa,
    How this made my heart ache: “shall I befuddle it with a smile,/offer tattered senses and crackers so/that depth of feeling /is manageable” — You have put into words the bruises and unmanageability of love battling in voiceless pain.
    pax,
    dora

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Dora πŸ™‚ so glad the poem resonated with you πŸ’„β€οΈ

  12. grapeling says:

    your title, and how you weave it into the whole, stands out to me ~

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, M πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it πŸ’„β€οΈ

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