The moment, their lips bade embrace, like sanguine flowers
inscribed with woe, oh passion throbbedΒ like wound from a
blade. She reckoned fit and faced her foe, his eyes sapphire
set in snow, silence wrought with music flowed.
“Let love be fire because I’m the spark, my soul propitious I
govern the dark.”Perched ‘neath his austere stare, her heart
cried out withΒ righteous air. “I ask not promise nor offer you
pledge, don’t push me because I’m closeΒ to edge.” His words
came out without a breath.
Until the darkest shades of night,
Delirium raised unto its height.
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This is so unusually dark to come from you, love how you did enjambment here… Your poetry keeps getting stronger and stronger.
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Happy for a revisit… still like it.
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You have such ability with meter and rhyme and, I agree with Bjorn, the enjambment is very effective.
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It does seem that our style & results are becoming stronger, clearer, & very clever. I enjoy the internal rhymes, & bold statements, & some of the dark side of your poetics.
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Until the darkest shades of night;
Delirium raised unto its height.
That is powerful….
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Such passionate and dark romance ~ I admire the rhyming cadence Sanaa ~
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Excellent, Sanaa, both technically and in content. ‘Throbbing’ with passion.
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This: “Let love be fire cause Iβm the spark” is wonderful. A very memorable poem.
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This is a very edgy poem and I think your run on lines help this. There is no clear edge to this kind of love. Very poetic and dramatic.
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You summon the moment here imaginatively and with creative force, Sanaa. I like this style in your work… With Best Wishes Scott
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Very lyrical…nice rhythm to the whole poem.
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Hi Sanaa,
That was a delightful poem, I especially loved the rhythmic flow of your words and the shape of the poem, beautifully done. Michael
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Such a mysterious feel I get from this…and I love it! The atmosphere is shadowy and I wonder if this is their first chance meeting, or new lovers, or enemies. Love how it rhymes, and flows from line to line. π
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This is all kind of good. The poetry is powerful..meter, rhyme, terse, substantial. The force of the words powerful..full of meaning, emotion, magnetism, passion. This is an unforgettable poem.
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Strong title and rhythm…impressive rhymes, Sanaa!
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I love that final rhyming couplet!
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This is intoxicating. Cheers.
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There is such intensity in this poem… the brightness of the fire, the sharpness of everything. And the last line of the second stanza creates a pause that takes our breath away along with his.
From the gut.
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You’ve written shades lighter before, so this exposes another side of Sanaa! This form seems to work for you and you use it to perfection!
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This is both beautiful and dark. I love the way you invoke passion here as weapon to be wielded or tense confrontation.
Powerful voice here.
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βI ask not promise or
offer pledge; donβt push
me cause Iβm close to edge
Even with love where one is expected to be compromising one still needs to be brave lest one ended being bullied. Very true Sanaa,yes!
Hank
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Bitter-sweet and well written. You are on a roll π
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βLet love be fire cause Iβm the spark” is a terrific line. While this is darker than you usually write I like it. You got the nitty-gritty of this relationship.
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This is beautiful…Your ability with rhyme boggles my mind. I am not good at it. I agree with Bjorn, your poetry is taking on new depth and dimension.
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“Passion throbbed like wound from blade” love that simile! I quite enjoy when pets make comparisons that seem so contrary, but work so well none-the-less.
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The mood you have created is of low rumblings of a volcano about to explode. Dark and passionate !
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Such heights of passion…lovely and I enjoy the use of sapphire. π
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The last line is a killer – fantastic! Made me think of Snow White also π
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Just a yearling to this thing called poetry writing, I always learn something new on dVerse….as in the meaning of “enjambment.” π
I especially like the final couplet here!
Late to reading this time…..but enjoying over my Sunday coffee!
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You’ve pushed your talents out further with this one. The rhythm suits the delirium you’ve described and there is a sharpness to the seduction that really works. Quite possibly one of your best – and I know you’re getting even better π
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passion packed, nice write WOW!!!
have a good Sunday
much love…
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Love the intensity and ridiculous amount of heat rolling off the page π
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A very powerful poem, Sanaa. I was especially caught by the line, “silence wrought with music flowed.”
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Sanaa, this poem is the kind that one dances to when they are feeling sad and mushy. I loved the play on words and the image of the anguished woman. thanks for sharing.
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True opposites
attract.. and i suppose
it’s a problem for humanity
as whole..
when same
becomes rule
instead of different..
there is alWays beauty
when
opposites
get together
perhaps not
in the arms
but
eyes
of
child..
and strength
of feat iN fearless Love..:)
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Well written. Enjoyed it.
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What a great illustration you included here Sanaa that really fitted in with the heat of the poem which felt quite real!
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It sure was good reading this again Sanaa.
Have a nice Tuesday.
Thanks for prompting us at Toads today.
much love…
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This is so romantic and in the end , all the secrets open, is it real or her imagination or?
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(It was definitely real π )
Love all the color contrast, the burning imagery, the dark tones of the emotions.
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Powerful words filled with meaning. Really liked it!
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An oldie but a goodie. I like the darkness of this.
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I am so glad you reposted Sanaa as I missed first time round.
Your words are truly dark and delicious.
Anna :o]
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Powerful and passionate.
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Dark, delightful, and beautifully written.
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Visceral and real; so well crafted, with the meter and rhythm accenting the intensity. Love the darkness in this edge!
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