Echo and Narcissus

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Then hear me now, as I bend and gaze;
Echo: Gaze
He plunged his arms to revere, embrace
Echo: Embrace

He hovered around fountain lost in praise;
Echo: Praise
And lost count of passing nights and days
Echo: Days

Beautiful being, why do you shun and fade?
Echo: Fade
Hear me sigh enamoured by looks and ways
Echo: Ways

Narcissus knew not he loved his own image;
Echo: Image
“Do we ever know when it’s time to finish?”
Echo: Finish

He weeped as tears meld with troubled water;
Echo: Water
He knew not what else he could possibly offer.
Echo: Offer

Vanity, I’m sensible enough not to fall as prey;
Echo: Play
As I write down my words in pursuit of today.
Echo: Stay

 

Form: Echo Verse

Photo credits:Β Echo and Narcissus, John William Waterhouse (1903)

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Comments

  1. Susan says:

    WOW!!!
    Beautifully woven, with such insightful repetitions. It made me think of my youthful adoration that I called love. I like the variation in the last verse.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Susan πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

      (and thank you for the lovely prompt)

  2. Sumana Roy says:

    A superb Echo Verse exploiting the Greek myth so perfect for this prompt. Brilliant, Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sumana πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

  3. Magical Mystical Teacher says:

    I would be unnerved to hear those echoes!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely πŸ™‚ thanks for stopping by, MMT ❀️

  4. De Jackson says:

    NICE use of Echo Verse, Sanaa. So clever.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, De πŸ™‚ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

  5. X says:

    I wrote it at Sumana’s as well. It was interesting in researching for the prompt that some of the more vain people identified were poets, in our need to express ourselves. It is a fine line there. Especially in the social media medium…as we often feel full on the praise we receive.

    The echo definitely adds much to this. It makes it rather haunting.

    How easy it is to fall prey to our vanity. I think the telling line in your verse is that, he did not even know he had fallen prey. Would we?

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, X πŸ™‚ for your wise and thoughtful words. I too wonder if we would be able to tell if we had fallen prey.. sigh..

    2. We have to be a little full of it! Or we would never share our work.

      1. Sanaa says:

        πŸ™‚

  6. Rommy says:

    It looks like Echo found her own words at the end.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely πŸ˜‰ thanks for stopping by, Rommy ❀️

  7. I like the echoing, which adds so much to the main lines.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sherry πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  8. kanzensakura says:

    Great use of the echo device Sanaa!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Toni πŸ™‚ so good to see you ❀️

  9. I am wondering how the poem would be if Echo’s words had been different? Nicely done….

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Annell πŸ™‚ so good to see you ❀️

  10. Old Egg says:

    This is beautifully crafted Sanaa, What a fool Narcissus is not to look on Echo. Sadly we all have faults don’t we?

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely πŸ™‚ thanks for stopping by, Robin ❀️

  11. panchali says:

    Wow….Just loved the beautiful Echo composition, Sanaa! Wonderfully written, thank you for sharing the poem with us.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Panchali πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

  12. Barry says:

    I love the call-and-response reverb of this one!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Barry πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  13. I really like the structure, and how Echo claims her own voice in the end.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Magaly πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

  14. vandana says:

    these echos sometimes show us the true path, for they come from our true heart.

    1. Sanaa says:

      πŸ™‚

  15. Thotpurge says:

    Clever use of the Echo form to write about Echo and Narcissus!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rajani 😊 so good to see you ❀

  16. Kerry says:

    This is so very well done. So clever to use Echo as a voice in the form. The mood is as languid as Narcissus and the scene, magical.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kerry 😊 so glad you enjoyed it ❀

  17. Anna :o] says:

    Superbly done Sanaa.
    How little we know ourselves…
    Anna :o]

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Anna 😊 so glad you liked it ❀

  18. I love the form and the repetition in this Sanaa!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Carrie πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

  19. gillena says:

    Brilliant echo Sanaa

    MuchπŸ’–love

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Gillena πŸ™‚ so good to see you ❀️

      much love…

  20. Love that echo, Sanaa!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kim πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it ❀️

  21. Bjorn says:

    Love your use of the Echo, especially since it works with Narcissus…

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Bjorn πŸ™‚ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

  22. Vivian Zems says:

    Ingenious! Love Echo and the twist at the end!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Vivian πŸ˜€ so glad you enjoyed it ❀️

  23. gillena says:

    Thank you for linking to Monday WRites Sanaa. Have a good week

    MuchπŸ’šlove

    1. Sanaa says:

      My pleasure Gillena ❀️

      Much love…

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