Disclosed on the cliffs of heart

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Outside golden light
gleaming soft upon my skin.
Such a strong sense of you
as I bend towards sleep,
exchange a smile that’s shyly
lewd, mournful and serene.
Night grew quiet as I recalled
brutality and sadism that
seem to appear in cyclical pattern.

 

Photo credits: Pinterest

Posted for ‘Quadrille #59′ @ dVerse Pub

And on ‘Tuesday Platform’ @ Real Toads

Comments

  1. Frank says:

    Nice description of that smile as “shyly
    lewd, mournful and serene”.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Frank πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it ❀️

  2. kanzensakura says:

    Wonderful description of the moon but oh, that brutality and sadism. It seems you are well shut of him.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Toni πŸ™‚ so good to see you ❀️

  3. Strawberry Abbey says:

    The ambiguity in the ending makes me wonder if the cycles are yours or your beloved’s. I do like the interesting twist at the end.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Abbey πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it ❀️

  4. Kathy Reed says:

    Both romantic and abusive…happens more often than we realize.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely πŸ™‚ thanks for stopping by, Kathy ❀️

  5. Grace says:

    It starts deceptively soft but these lines say otherwise:

    brutality and sadism that
    seem to appear in cyclical pattern.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Grace πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

  6. V.J. says:

    Twist at the end took me by surprise. There is more to this story.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, V.J πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  7. Reena Saxena says:

    The picture is ethereal, the beginning romantic and then, it dips into …… a reflection on life and love.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Reena πŸ™‚ so good to see you ❀️

  8. Very interesting poem…. You gave just enough to make one wonder…does she or doesn’t she//
    Dwight

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Dwight πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  9. Jo-Anne says:

    Believed your poem to be going in one direction, but the brutality and sadism line slammed the melancholy door shut. Some complex emotion there..

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jo-Anne πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

  10. Oh Sanaa, reading this was painful. You’ve described the cycles of abuse so well in 44 words. xxx

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kim πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

  11. erbiage says:

    like coming up for a breath of air, before being submerged in torment again. gruesome and gripping.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Eric πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it ❀️

  12. Thotpurge says:

    lewd, mournful and serene… that is quite a smile!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Rajani πŸ™‚ so good to see you ❀️

  13. I am left without words……

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Annell πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it ❀️

  14. Vandana says:

    For some time it felt like a beautiful dream, but in the end it washed away

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely πŸ™‚ thanks for stopping by, Vandana ❀️

  15. Jane Seymour says:

    I too was taken by surprise at the end. Chilling!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Jane πŸ™‚ so good to see you ❀️

  16. What an ending! The last few lines are terrifying all by themselves, but reading them after experiencing the tenderness of the beginning makes them even more explosive. Like abuse, which is more painful because most abusers don’t do it all the time.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Aww gosh!πŸ’œ Thank you so much, Magaly πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it! ❀️

  17. Chris Evans says:

    It is as Muscio says ‘Abuse is the means in which violence retards love.’

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely πŸ™‚ thanks for stopping by, Chris ❀️

  18. I don’t bend towards sleep, but lean. What a surprise ending just when I was thinking romantically.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Colleen πŸ™‚ so good to see you ❀️

  19. Kerry says:

    There is a wonderful contrast in these lines:

    exchange a smile that’s shyly
    lewd, mournful and serene.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Kerry πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  20. Rall says:

    Abuse is not worth any romantic lovely experience. It eventually destroys you. Get out now.!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely πŸ™‚ thanks for stopping by, Rall ❀️

  21. That glance, “shyly lewd, mournful and serene” strikes me…..I understand why it is mournful after reading the closing lines.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sherry πŸ™‚ so glad you liked it ❀️

  22. Elaine Huang says:

    The closing left me absolutely breathless! Phew!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Elaine πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

  23. gillena says:

    Interesting and surprising. Leaving questions in the mind of the reader makes for mystery also. Happy you dropped by my blog today Sanaa

    Muchβ™₯️love

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Gillena πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

      Much🌹love

  24. Sara McNulty says:

    Love the painting, and your description of her smile!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Sara πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

  25. Cara O' Donoghue says:

    You have packed a lot of emotion into this quadrille! If you ever get that gut feeling that something isn’t right about a person or situation, trust it.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely πŸ™‚ thanks for stopping by, Cara ❀️

  26. So sensual and inticing, but oh, that twist in the last lines! A marvelous write, Sanaa! πŸ™‚

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Frank πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  27. Janice says:

    A portrait of mixed feelings and memories artfully portrayed Sanaa.

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Janice πŸ™‚ so good to see you ❀️

  28. Vivian Zems says:

    From soft to brutal- wrapped in eloquence!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Vivian πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  29. a very sensual poem with an interesting twist at the end

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Mary πŸ˜€ so good to see you ❀️

  30. Amaya says:

    Whoa, a foreboding turn of one’s passion.

    1. Sanaa says:

      πŸ˜‰

  31. This is truly lovely Sanaa!!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Carrie πŸ˜€ so glad you liked it ❀️

  32. Pat says:

    Such a strong sense of you
    as I bend towards sleep, –

    these are my favorite lines, especially the idea of bending towards sleep – what a very interesting and fascinating image this paints – how intimate –
    and as others have said, quite the abrupt twist in the ending – quite the counterpoint, all in 44!

    1. Sanaa says:

      Thank you so much, Pat πŸ™‚ so good to see you ❀️

  33. Bjorn Rudberg says:

    When only moon can soothe… torment and abuse is so chilling… may it just end

    1. Sanaa says:

      Definitely πŸ™‚ thanks for stopping by, Bjorn ❀️

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