Across the hall a woman I see;
She played some naughty tricks on me.
Thought she was cool – thought she was fine
Must have lost my freaking mind.
Soon we danced on endlessly;
Lord what fools us mortals be.
Power to change the mind had she;
I bid the heart not fervent be.
Though eyes be closed yet I could see;
Crystal chandelier swinging free.
Like stars these chandeliers seem to be;
Hope against hope for chance to increase.
They say love is sweet – love is fine
They probably were just drunk on wine.
Her beauty was such – a dream sublime
Half forgot my thoughts and lines.
As future became present – present became past
Ignorant of what might come at last.
The maiden she flew before eyes could blink;
She lived for nothing but victuals and drink!
Mourning the amount which had been lost;
Startled how much her love had cost!
Should flee should run – oh what’s the use
Beautiful dame had me hung on noose.
They say love is sweet – love is fine
They probably were just drunk on wine.
Photo credits:Β danceparade.org
What a woman ~ I specially like this part:
Beautiful dame had me hung on noose.
They say love is sweet β love is fine
They probably were just drunk on wine.
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Sounds like a kind of cautionary tale to me, Sanaa. The combination of victuals and wine accomplished nothing good!
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A dance without
drink.. a dance for
Love.. a dance
alone..
Love
Solo
gRows..
partners
come and go..
Solo
Lives
DanCinG Love..:)
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This is my fave:
“She played some naughty tricks on me.
Thought she was cool β thought she was fine
Must have lost my freaking mind.”
She sounds like fun to me. π
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PS: Yeah she is π
The crazy ones always are. π
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So very well done. The meter and flow works so perfectly. Nice.
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She sounds like fun but she also sounds like trouble!!! A fun write here. Love the photo. My husband and I do ballroom dancing and now we are in middle grade for Argentine Tango.
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Ha… So easily gullible men are… Dancing the whole night, being caught in her web for just nothing…
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Oh when we are drunk, we certainly can make poor decisions, whether we are drunk on wine or worse, drunk on love.
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I love your opening verse the best, Sanaa. “Must have lost my freaking mind”…yes, I think so!
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They say love is sweet β love is fine
They probably were just drunk on wine.
Brilliant write Sanaa! You have that natural flair. And the parting here is classic! It has a closing, a punch-line in fact!
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βMust have lost my freaking mindββ¦ yes, my fav line, too.
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Ahh…the tease of the tango and the woman who didn’t take him well the first time around.
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Just loved it… And yes the opening lines are the best.
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Your stars stanza is my favorite!! Great poem!
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You almost had me feeling sorry for the poor man who was so caught up and then cut off from an unreal fantasy culture that would not exist but for consumers like him. Or was it a woman betrayed by a woman? And yet, the same comment applies, for how, why, will people insist in falling in lust instantaneously and thinking it could be love? And wine doesn’t help. Loved the refrain and rhyme.
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This flows so beautifully ~ musical and it has rhythm like dancing π
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Hah, the rhythms here make this a fast dance, or a gallop, even! Interesting how the freaking loss of mind seems temporary at the start, but then by the end, defeat.
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Ah, the tender trap. Well observed.
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A cautionary tale…We are caught by the glass we drink….Love it!
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You are a rhyme-mistress!
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What a ‘femme fatale’, he was hooked for minute one, no doubt about it.
Sanaa thanks for sharing at Monday WRites; its okay to ‘grab my button and place it on your post when you link up
have a nice week
much love…
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Ha, the old story. π
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Great refrain and rhythm in this, Sanaa. Love it!
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