Breathing out the Blues

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Photo credits: Picture of sunset in K.L

For my prompt ‘Intuition’s as though we’re seeing with our soul’
on Friday 12th August at 8 am EDT.

Posted on poems written on Prompt Nights

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also posting for Poetics @ dVerse Poets Pub

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56 Replies to “Breathing out the Blues”

  1. This has to be at the top of my “Sanaa Favorite” list. Yes, it does read like the blues. And that one line about letting go–so very hard to learn. Bravo, my friend.

  2. I think sometimes the best way is to let go. The part about the white snow showing every step as you go is an intense image for me. Yes, sometimes we must be careful in how we walk.

  3. Yes, this piece seems to break new ground for you, & you have risen to the prompt, a night flower bursting with silly black & blue petals, the blue Navy, hidden in shadow. I like it a lot; very thoughtful. (pardon me while I register for the 50th time in order to comment; smile).

  4. “I gasp,” “I breathe,” “I feel”…I like how you start each verse, Sanaa; it helps set the tone for your beautiful verses.

  5. “…often the best way to learn is let go..” LOVE this! And also the idea that our actions, even our words, leave tracks in the snow. Yes…to step lightly wherever we go.

  6. Sanaa – I love how you brought in colors of the sunset, and the breath of an ending day along with memories — the white of the snow with fresh, new beginnings. Beautiful images that evoke both sadness & a quiet comfort. Thanks for sharing.

  7. I love that the speaker acknowledges the fact that there are things to worry about, but remembers that going through life worrying about everything is no living at all. She sounds like a well-balanced lady. I really like this one, Sanaa. ❤

  8. The construction of this piece works very well for what you want to convey. The physical gasp preceding the vivid physical descriptions, and the progression of the protagonist’s thoughts from there build up the feeling of hope throughout the piece.

  9. Let memories cast their glow
    And cherish all that we know

    Wonderful lines Sanaa! Yes, if memories were to help us to recall then it would be such a glorious picture to see!

    Hank

  10. I love this rhythmic poem I especially like the lines “be careful how your tread, for every step will show” and this is so true, often when we look back we can see our footsteps clearly,,,

  11. I like this very much, Sanaa. The way you broke it into three pieces with the gasp, breathe and feel; the way your words painted a picture, gave good advice and finally, an instructional warning. Lovely

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