Beneath the veil

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Veiled as though a moon behind the clouds;
I thought while he covered me with a silken
cloth. His breath like lonesome vapour trail;
made me long for cheeks to blush and pale.

Observe the dew on his brow and dust ‘neath
the nails; as he begged me not to fear but oh
his eyes told me the tale. Lulled with sounds
of dolor and sounds of pure delight; memory
grown so dim with passing days and nights.

The stars douse heaven with light;
As I wish upon to beckon his sight.

 

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Comments

  1. Awwwww. The desire to woo her artist back once he’s finished with her. This is so wistful, and sad.

    1. Sanaa says:

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  2. lillian says:

    oh this is beautiful — imagining the love she develops for him over the posing time — and then he places a veil over her figuratively within the bust itself — but metaphorically in the leaving of her. And I love the reference to dust — I always imagine the sculptor as having dust beneath his/her fingernails, hair dusted grey by the marble dust….
    My mind keeps moving in your voice here. Really love this take on the prompt!

    1. Sanaa says:

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  3. Bjorn Rudberg says:

    This is like the reverse of the Pygmalion, the statue falling in love with the sculptor… so sweet.

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  4. Lovely poem inspired by a lovely statue.

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  5. Grace says:

    I admire the perspective from the sculpture’s point of view ~ My favorite lines are the ending couplet ~

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  6. MY FAIR ARTIST, for sure; an incredible premise here, that the art we create remembers us, & even though someone else may adopt it, & take it home, it has the emotional memory of its first love; as we all do.

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  7. Gayle Walters Rose says:

    I love how you described the artist’s breath and how she wished for cheeks that blush or pale: ” His breath like lonesome vapour trail;/made me long for cheeks to blush and pale.” Totally beautiful, Sanaa!

    1. Sanaa says:

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  8. Sanaa, those first four lines continued to haunt me after I finished reading the rhyming couplet. What a wonderful idea, a statue in love with her sculptor:
    ‘His breath like lonesome vapour trail;
    made me long for cheeks to blush and pale.’

    Now this would make a great short story.

    1. Sanaa says:

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  9. Sumana Roy says:

    Love so beautifully captivated…the sculpture for its maker, so unique and beautiful…

    1. Sanaa says:

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  10. The longing and resulting loneliness are deep and touching in your beautiful poem!

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  11. Bryan Ens says:

    A very wistful piece. Could be seen as a woman longing for her lost lover, or the statue longing for the artist. Beautiful!

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  12. Kathy Reed says:

    A lovely poem with musical lyrics and rhythm….this has to be how she would feel after spending so much time with him 😉

    1. Sanaa says:

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  13. Tender and romantic,Sanaa! I love this!

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  14. lynn says:

    A love-ly piece of love lost…seems to be a veil of mourning. Graceful words, Sanaa.

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  15. SMiLes.. i for one
    am never one for
    coveRed beauty..
    to hide in stone
    clothes.. idol
    away from
    blush
    soft skin
    paleS in
    comparison
    as beauty clothed
    wiTh heaVenly born sKin..:)

    1. Sanaa says:

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  16. Mish says:

    This was a pleasure to read…a few times over. You have described so eloquently the pangs of love and longing.

    1. Sanaa says:

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  17. Thotpurge says:

    Very creative Sanaa… I think this is one of my favourite poems from your recent posts! Nicely done.

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  18. Jae Rose says:

    I felt you told us her story – animated her – and how beautiful that was..

    1. Sanaa says:

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  19. Old Egg says:

    I think most sculpted figures and busts would be in love with their creators and want them to return to them.

    1. Sanaa says:

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  20. HA says:

    Aha! Now that’s wonderful; an amorous creation. I liked the delicate touches in this verse. Beautifully penned. 🙂

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  21. A very interesting piece.

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  22. Mary says:

    Ah, there is so much beneath that veil; and so much behind the words in your poem, Sanaa.

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  23. gillena says:

    The veiled finality can be grave and foreboding; veiled and done. Oh but little does she know, how the tables will turn once she becomes the center of attraction to her so many viewers once she is unveiled once more.

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  24. Sherry Marr says:

    How beautiful: “The stars douse heaven with light.”

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  25. Sanaa you write such beautiful, delightful poems….love stories to gladden my heart!

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  26. Wendy Bourke says:

    Loved the way in which you stepped back from the traditional perspective, in this piece – and have done so with such beautiful, captivating words.

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  27. A living breath that makes marble wish for life. What a powerful thought! I love that your metaphor brings colors into my heads, and wishes ❤

    1. Sanaa says:

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