Because I couldn’t just give up

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Because I couldn’t just give up
Let my fingers slip from yours-
The heart would – bleed from a bullet
Had he walked through these doors.

Such emotion ‘neath the rough exterior
Let me thaw this icy stare
We dreamed of something rare – special
I’ll take my chances – ’cause I dare.

Let’s look beyond our differences
Come lets pull out a chair
He stood up before I could respond
Twirled me joyfully into the air.

 

 

Photo credits: wallpaperswide.com

Form: Common Meter

Posted on Meeting the Bar @ dVerse Poets Pub

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& posted on the Tuesday Platform @ Real Toads

50 Replies to “Because I couldn’t just give up”

  1. The tug and pull of relationships is a good topic for this form. It’s nice that it has a happy ending and I do hope that after that twirl, they were able to sit down and talk it out!!!

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  2. Nice job. I love the playfulness of love. So a nice close on this. It is a back forth with love. As usual nice job with the form.

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  3. Your site makes me sign in every time I comment; bummer. Nice use of the Ed-style common meter, but for me, the message fills me with alacrity, for deep dissent not fully explored can lead to tragedy; as my first two “practice” marriages can vouch for.

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  4. That is an optimistic ending, and I hope neither of them give up too quickly on this relationship. A good capture of the style and feeling, especially the bleed from a bullet and the whole of the second stanza.

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      Thank you so much, so glad you liked it 😀
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  5. Oh.. primitive cultures.. egalitarian
    or matriarchal in substance..
    where emotions rule
    the human
    heart..
    instead of
    iron fence
    controlling
    subjugating
    patriarchy
    repressing
    and oppressing
    male emotions..
    and THAT
    is changing
    where men
    can LOVE TOO..
    so yeah.. change is
    possible.. but it starts
    in loving arms of
    mom AND DAD..:)

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  6. Nothing like a dash of courage and a dare that reaps sweet rewards
    have a lovely Sunday Sanaa, i’m happy you linked up at my Sunday Lime.

    much love…

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